diff --git a/chapters/chapter-002.md b/chapters/chapter-002.md index 9b536f8..c5d8ca0 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-002.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-002.md @@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ constraints: - linsan is 9 --- -> Much of the the Sterlig fame comes from the distinctive wood harvested from the family-owned valley near the city of Penesol. --- _History of Traditional Music_ +> Much of the Sterlig fame comes from the distinctive wood harvested from the family-owned valley near the city of Penesol. --- _History of Traditional Music_ Linsan sat on her father's work chair in the center of the living room. Her bare feet dug into the faded blue rug as she struggled to sit with her back straight. She took a deep breath and worked the rest of her violin back under her chin. @@ -184,7 +184,7 @@ She looked down at her nightgown. "Grab your bathrobe. I'm sorry, but this is important and I don't have a lot of time. Please? For me? Don't ask questions, just do it." -Minutes later, she was sitting in the saddle of a spirited horse and cradled by her father's arms and legs. She clutched the pommel with one hand and the shirt gather at her her father's elbow with the other. +Minutes later, she was sitting in the saddle of a spirited horse and cradled by her father's arms and legs. She clutched the pommel with one hand and the shirt gather at her father's elbow with the other. Her father held his arm over her chest to hold her in place as they raced through the dark. The only light was a lantern that Dukan held up to lit the way. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-009.md b/chapters/chapter-009.md index 4464a37..6f4cdc0 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-009.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-009.md @@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ The smoking ruins were still hot. Heat rippled the air around him. Linsan was su "In the vault." -The vault was the only part of the building was was completely surrounded by stone. It had no bricks, just the smooth surface of magically shaped rock. Despite that, much of it had been burned out and everything was a jumble of scorched wood and pieces of paper. The stench was overpowering. +The vault was the only part of the building was completely surrounded by stone. It had no bricks, just the smooth surface of magically shaped rock. Despite that, much of it had been burned out and everything was a jumble of scorched wood and pieces of paper. The stench was overpowering. Then she spotted the body. Right in the middle of the floor, there was a charred corpse. At the sight, Linsan felt bile rising up in her throat. "By the Couple," she whispered. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-012.md b/chapters/chapter-012.md index cc9425c..7cbd045 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-012.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-012.md @@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ Years of dancing helped with the slow, steady movement down the noisy stairs. Sh Over the last day, she had secreted her travel supplies and placed them underneath the porch. Even though most of her trips were to the valley and back, she had a number of week-long camping trips at the ruins. She hoped with her gathered supplies and skills she had learned would help her on her trip. -In the back of her mind, her imagination started going through the possible failures. The biggest one that haunted her was the the possibility that she couldn't hunt or scavenge enough food. If things went well, she would hitchhike to Stone Over Moon Waters, the most probably destination for the murderers, and either scavenge, hunt, or busk for food. Any of them could go horribly wrong and she would either end up injured in the wild, robbed, or imprisoned. +In the back of her mind, her imagination started going through the possible failures. The biggest one that haunted her was the possibility that she couldn't hunt or scavenge enough food. If things went well, she would hitchhike to Stone Over Moon Waters, the most probably destination for the murderers, and either scavenge, hunt, or busk for food. Any of them could go horribly wrong and she would either end up injured in the wild, robbed, or imprisoned. Linsan shook her head as she reached the bottom of the stairs. No, she couldn't worry about the worst case. She breathed deeply as she crept over toward the front door. She had left only one thing inside, her violin in its case. It was inside the coat closet, hanging in the back. @@ -190,4 +190,4 @@ With shaking hand, Linsan picked up the violin and followed her parents into the Linsan held her breath as she set the bow on the string. It felt different playing already, as if it was made for her. She closed her eyes and drew the bow. -The single clear note felt like it was being drawn from her heart. The air shimmered around her, warping and sparkling as she felt the energy gathering. With a smooth twist of her wrist, she drew it it up and started into a jig that set the room alight with magic and her feet kicking. +The single clear note felt like it was being drawn from her heart. The air shimmered around her, warping and sparkling as she felt the energy gathering. With a smooth twist of her wrist, she drew it up and started into a jig that set the room alight with magic and her feet kicking. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-017.md b/chapters/chapter-017.md index 6c38916..a64f34b 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-017.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-017.md @@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ Linsan had enough for that. "No, that's okay. I can get those. Fair is fair. Aft "Thanks." Maril groaned again. "Hitch the horses too." -As soon as the wagon came to a stop in front of a building with a mural of pepper flowers, Maril hopped and and rushed inside. +As soon as the wagon came to a stop in front of a building with a mural of pepper flowers, Maril hopped and rushed inside. Linsan crawled out of the back and gingerly took up the reins. Slipping off the wagon, she gave the horse a wide berth to tie the reins to a hitching post. Unsure of the knot, she did her best before stepping back to look around. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-027.md b/chapters/chapter-027.md index e18b40a..6c0f25c 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-027.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-027.md @@ -28,7 +28,7 @@ Linsan stumbled to a stop. Her case thumped against her hip. "What?" It was more words than she had gotten from any other tribe member, but the rejection still hurt. Shaking her head, Linsan apologized and then turned away. -She made it only a few steps before before Gab called out. "What kind of person carries a damn musical instrument around here in the heat? Do you know how hot it is? What if you drop it in a creek?" +She made it only a few steps before Gab called out. "What kind of person carries a damn musical instrument around here in the heat? Do you know how hot it is? What if you drop it in a creek?" Linsan couldn't escape the sweat that prickled on her brow. She shook her head and clamped a hand over her case. She looked over her shoulder to answer. "It's important to me." diff --git a/chapters/chapter-028.md b/chapters/chapter-028.md index 11430c6..2d7b38a 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-028.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-028.md @@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ Brook's lip curled in a smile. "I might have deserved it. Were you thinking abou Brook looked up and swayed her hips as she thought. "I guess, mostly Guder, Padorsin, and Rag. Those were daddy's favorites." -All three were composers for symphonies. Sedate ones that that, with grand sweeping music that rose and fell like the waves of the ocean. It was the music that was perfect for dramatic scenes for her mother. However, none of them had the steady beats and rhythm that would let Linsan's magic to build nor the crescendos and twists that allowed her to manifest an attack. +All three were composers for symphonies. Sedate ones with grand sweeping music that rose and fell like the waves of the ocean. It was the music that was perfect for dramatic scenes for her mother. However, none of them had the steady beats and rhythm that would let Linsan's magic to build nor the crescendos and twists that allowed her to manifest an attack. Brook rolled her eye and gave an exasperating sight. "What? Wrong type of music?" diff --git a/chapters/chapter-032.md b/chapters/chapter-032.md index b3a9517..a08a2d7 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-032.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-032.md @@ -316,6 +316,6 @@ The ground in a hundred feet behind them shot straight up in a column of flame a A sickening feeling caught her as the world stopped, a brutal silence. -Then the buggy plunged into into the crater with brutal efficiency. +Then the buggy plunged into the crater with brutal efficiency. Linsan only had time to wrap her body around the Sterlig and grab Brook's hand before they crashed to earth. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-035.md b/chapters/chapter-035.md index 081a5db..d191800 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-035.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-035.md @@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ summary: > Linsan and Brook return to Fanasis Village with the ruins of her car. The game is still going on, but they need a room for the night. --- -> To brighten their lives and enjoy the game, thousands will travel travel all day to spend the night at a nearby inn, share a wagon ride to the game, and then come back for drinks and celebration, all before heading home. --- Podalis Krum-Tercier, _A World Without Vehicles_ +> To brighten their lives and enjoy the game, thousands will travel all day to spend the night at a nearby inn, share a wagon ride to the game, and then come back for drinks and celebration, all before heading home. --- Podalis Krum-Tercier, _A World Without Vehicles_ When Linsan saw the crowd gathered around the inn, she groaned. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-041.md b/chapters/chapter-041.md index 664f866..b1f87a6 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-041.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-041.md @@ -43,7 +43,7 @@ Holding up a finger to Brook's lip, Linsan grinned. "A storm long since past. Yo Brook's cheeks colored and her eyes crossed to look at Linsan's hand. "Yes. Please." -Stepping back, Linsan pictured the movement. "Okay, so about about this... ba-da ba-da?" As she said the beats, she swayed her body and stepped high, striking her feet in time with the beat. A familiar rush came. "And then we ba-da-da-dum!" She kicked up her feet, arched back, and then hopped forward. +Stepping back, Linsan pictured the movement. "Okay, so how about this... ba-da ba-da?" As she said the beats, she swayed her body and stepped high, striking her feet in time with the beat. A familiar rush came. "And then we ba-da-da-dum!" She kicked up her feet, arched back, and then hopped forward. Her foot thudded on the ground. Peeking up, she saw Brook watching intently. Linsan smiled and felt a thrill of desire rushing through her. Despite being in the middle of the field, it felt as if they were once again in the bed exploring each other's bodies. "Again?" diff --git a/chapters/chapter-055.md b/chapters/chapter-055.md index 5c251ac..260c63f 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-055.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-055.md @@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ Miska's dress had gloves that disappeared into her sleeves and almost completely Both of them had stopped at a hairdresser who brushed out and did their hair in a high pile with artful braids and what felt like a pound of pins. All topped with hats with lace and mesh and flowers. -But compared to Miska and Linsan, Brook shine. She had a green dress the color of the ocean with a moon motif embroidered on it. Layers of taffeta and lace flowed with her flowing movements that that must have taken her hours to perfect. Her posture was also flawless; Linsan thought that she looked a lot like Linsan's mother as she laughed gaily with strangers. +But compared to Miska and Linsan, Brook shine. She had a green dress the color of the ocean with a moon motif embroidered on it. Layers of taffeta and lace flowed with her flowing movements that must have taken her hours to perfect. Her posture was also flawless; Linsan thought that she looked a lot like Linsan's mother as she laughed gaily with strangers. The auction house had too much gold and marble for any reasonable building, and that included the banks Linsan had visited. Even in the entry hall---larger than her parent's house---there were easily hundreds of people in dresses and tuxedos milling about. Their discussions were cheerful and gay. Conversations had nothing to do with the violin or the sale. Linsan guessed they just had an excuse to be seen more than the heirloom somewhere in the building. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-057.md b/chapters/chapter-057.md index 3965f1e..5bf0f1c 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-057.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-057.md @@ -141,7 +141,7 @@ Sopenar slowly turned. "Prove it." He pointed to the violin case that was once again in Miska's hand. "Play me a song that only the daughter of Tisin would know. Give me a song that has never been on a stage or sung in the world." -Linsan frowned as she tore through her memory, casting through the history of her her parents. She teased the pin in her hair. "There is no..." she glanced at Junith who was crying. Then she remembered the sheet music in the case, the torn paper with a single song she had never heard of before. "_Safe Adventures, Our Departed Loves_." +Linsan frowned as she tore through her memory, casting through the history of her parents. She teased the pin in her hair. "There is no..." she glanced at Junith who was crying. Then she remembered the sheet music in the case, the torn paper with a single song she had never heard of before. "_Safe Adventures, Our Departed Loves_." Junith inhaled sharply. diff --git a/chapters/chapter-058.md b/chapters/chapter-058.md index aa932cc..31aa8c9 100644 --- a/chapters/chapter-058.md +++ b/chapters/chapter-058.md @@ -253,7 +253,7 @@ As the fireballs came raining down, the three wove around each other. Miska woul Only waves of heat struck Linsan as she improvised her dance. All the hours of practice sank in as she took her skill to recreate the song and used it to find a dance that would match it. -Her friends worked with her her as they blocked the attacks even as Gabaw returned to strike at her. +Her friends worked with her as they blocked the attacks even as Gabaw returned to strike at her. Heat and fire raged through the hall.