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@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ The woman raised her head. Milky eyes turned to stare at her.
Linsan stumbled to a stop. Her case thumped against her hip. "What?" Linsan stumbled to a stop. Her case thumped against her hip. "What?"
"You deaf, Girl? Old Gab is tired and has no interest in any young kid's shit." She lifted one one hand. "So turn that tiny little ass of yours around and head back to the square."s "You deaf, Girl? Old Gab is tired and has no interest in any young kid's shit." She lifted one one hand. "So turn that tiny little ass of yours around and head back to the square."
Shaking her head, Linsan turned around. "Sorry for interrupting you." Shaking her head, Linsan turned around. "Sorry for interrupting you."
@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ Gab smiled broadly, revealing three missing teeth. "Oh, I loved that play. I saw
Gripping her case tighter, Linsan forced a smile on her lips. "She does have a beautiful voice." Gripping her case tighter, Linsan forced a smile on her lips. "She does have a beautiful voice."
Gab pointed to her cabin. "Come up and talk to me. I have tea." Gab pointed to her cabin. Her entire hand was covered in faint tattoos that covered every inch of skin from fingertip to her elbow in a dense pattern. "Come up and talk to me. I have tea."
"I really need to ask some questions." "I really need to ask some questions."

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@ -50,9 +50,9 @@ Feeling uncomfortable, She let out her breath in a long shuddering gasp as she l
"Two of them. One for me and another for you. Both of them were the best the place had to offer, plus hot bath services, and full meals. They don't know how to handle cars here, so I also paid for two horses." "Two of them. One for me and another for you. Both of them were the best the place had to offer, plus hot bath services, and full meals. They don't know how to handle cars here, so I also paid for two horses."
Surprised, Linsan could only stare. "Not the cheapest room?" Surprised, Linsan could only stare. "Not the cheap room for me?"
"We're in this together, aren't we? Come on, I really could use a bath and a dress that isn't utterly ruined." "We're in this together, aren't we?" A ghost of a smile crossed Brook's face. "Come on, I really could use a bath and a dress that isn't utterly ruined."
When Linsan noticed Brook limping, she held out her hand. When Linsan noticed Brook limping, she held out her hand.
@ -92,7 +92,7 @@ Linsan chuckled. "No. A playwright named Tabil in town."
"I know Tabil, he had gone to a lot of Daddy's parties." "I know Tabil, he had gone to a lot of Daddy's parties."
"He's also a leech and keeps trying to bed my mother. H-He also owned the Sterlig my grandfather made." "He's also a leech and keeps trying to bed my mother. H-He also owned the Sterlig my grandfather made. They borrowed it."
Brook's jaw tightened. "Your mother's pride?" Brook's jaw tightened. "Your mother's pride?"
@ -104,9 +104,19 @@ Inside, the main room was packed with more people wearing the blue and white. Al
With her cheeks burning, Linsan headed toward the side where there was a bar with bottles behind it. With her cheeks burning, Linsan headed toward the side where there was a bar with bottles behind it.
One of the men in the chairs stood up. He was an older, balding man with weathered skin and rough hands. "Hey, Hab, you said the good rooms were taken by a pretty lady?" One of the men in the chairs stood up. He was an older, balding man with weathered skin and rough hands. Dense, swirling tattoos covered his hands from his knuckles clear up to his elbows. "Hey, Hab, you said the good rooms were taken by a pretty lady? That her?"
A man behind the bar looked up. "Yes, Cal, and if you make our guests uncomfortable, I'm going to kick you and yours out for the season. Given that every pub and inn is filled for ten leagues around Gaveil, you're going to either be sleeping in that wagon of yours or driving a long time and will miss the game." A man behind the bar looked up. He looked annoyed. "Yes, Cal. What's your point?"
"I just have to convince her to give me my room back?"
Brook stopped. She straightened and planted her fists on her hips.
The bartender spoke first in a sharp tone, "If you try, you risk annoying her and she paid far more than you ever had. Not to mention, there is only one of her and she doesn't insist on jamming six int one room."
"I can't even ask?" Cal said. He glanced down at the people at his table and then back at Brook.
"No," said the bartender. "I'm going to kick you and yours out for the season. Given that every pub and inn is filled for ten leagues around Gaveil, you're going to either be sleeping in that wagon of yours or driving a long time and will miss the game."
Cal looked at the bar. "How could you say that, Hab? I come here every game, every time. You know I'm good." Cal looked at the bar. "How could you say that, Hab? I come here every game, every time. You know I'm good."
@ -120,22 +130,28 @@ Cal cracked his knuckles and looked over Brook. "Well, welcome to our humble lit
Brook nodded curtly. Brook nodded curtly.
"Though, I'd be honored if you be willing to share your room with me," he said with a grin. "I'm a considerate lover." "Though, I'd be honored if you be willing to share your room with me," he said with a grin. "I'm a considerate lover. Just me, though, none of these---"
"Shut your mouth, Cal," Hab said with a warning tone. "She's a lady and you are not to speak to her like that." "Shut your mouth, Cal," Hab said with a warning tone. "She's a lady and you are not to speak to her like that."
Brook held up her hand. "Additionally, I'd rather sleep with a venomous snake on a bad day than get anywhere near you." Brook held up her hand. "Additionally, I'd rather sleep with a venomous snake on a bad day than get anywhere near you. I find those..." She gestured to his hands. "... markings to be disgusting and wouldn't deign to have them anywhere near my body."
Linsan cringed at her sharp tone. Linsan cringed at her sharp tone.
Cal looked at her and then laughed. It was a booming laugh but no one else in the room had joined him. Cal looked down at his hands and then laughed. It was a booming laugh but no one else in the room had joined him.
A man at his table patted his hand. "Just sit down and shut up." A man at his table patted his hand. "Just sit down and shut up. You're going to get us kicked out."
Cal looked around at the silent room. "No, I've choked on my words enough." His voice was darker. "I'll come back when I've sobered." The laughter stopped. Cal looked around while his smile dropped from his face. "Shit," he muttered.
The bartender pointed to the door.
Cal's face darkened. "I'll come back when I've sobered."
"That would be best," said the bartender. "That would be best," said the bartender.
No one else said anything.
Pushing himself away from the table, Cal walked past them. "My apologies," he said curtly before leaving. Pushing himself away from the table, Cal walked past them. "My apologies," he said curtly before leaving.
Brook strode past Linsan and headed straight for the bar. Brook strode past Linsan and headed straight for the bar.
@ -150,7 +166,7 @@ Linsan looked at Brook's ruined outfit. "No, you. You need it far more than me.
Linsan waited until Brook headed upstairs for the bath before she looked around. The room was crowded. Even Cal's seat had been taken by someone else. Linsan waited until Brook headed upstairs for the bath before she looked around. The room was crowded. Even Cal's seat had been taken by someone else.
Holding her violin case close, she headed out to find a table to wait it out. The tables outside were just as crowded except for the furthest one where Cal sat on the edge of the lights. Holding her violin case close, she headed outside to find a table to wait for one to open inside. The tables outside were just as crowded except for the furthest one where Cal sat on the edge of the lights.
Linsan toyed with the idea of taking a walk but then decided she was tired of trails or sitting in the Glasscoaster. She headed to the table with Cal. Linsan toyed with the idea of taking a walk but then decided she was tired of trails or sitting in the Glasscoaster. She headed to the table with Cal.

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@ -112,4 +112,4 @@ Linsan blinked past her own tears. "I don't know yet. But we will. Somehow."
Brook took a deep breath and then buried her face into Linsan's shoulder again. Her sobs wracked her body but the sharpness had faded. Brook took a deep breath and then buried her face into Linsan's shoulder again. Her sobs wracked her body but the sharpness had faded.
Unable to do anything else, Linsan held her friend. Unable to do anything else, Linsan held her friend and said anything more.